a tree succumbs
to wind and rain
moist earthy scent
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tree succumbs
to wind and rain
roots revealed
This is in gracious response to the weekly prompt "Earth/Dirt/Mud" at One Deep Breath. I've always loved the smell of fresh dirt. This is a great prompt to get us closer to the ground. I love it!
17 comments:
I know just what you mean. That scent is so unique.
I love the smell of earth too, especially after rain!
Oh the first is the one that works best for me. I love you mentioning the smell of fresh moist dirt!
Very evocative poem and beautiful photo too
hello mizzzapped!
the haiku is wonderful. the second I like. I imagine the roots very easily.
oh, and thanks ever so for visiting KLDP.
It's amazing the power of rain and wind to uproot a tree! Wonderful haiku- very visual!
I just love the smell of earth...wonderful!
It's fun getting to know good writers and poets. Good job tonight. Look forward to reading more from you.
That first haiku certainly evoked the smell of mud and earth for me! Good job :)
Don't know which of these I like better! Filled with the sensations... thanks.
I prefer the "roots revealed" of the second, but there's less of the mud idea and no olfactory pleasure. The tree is actually secondary in the firt haiku, where it is essential in the second.
I love the earthy smell too. Beets always remind me of it as I think they kind of smell earthy.
this is beautiful, it's like an abstract painting!!
Good. I really like the second one. The sense of inversion, seeing things usually hidden.
I thank you all for your comments and it's fun to know most of you enjoy the earthy sent of mud ;) I also appreciate your input about each haiku. The first one was written with the prompt in mind, but the second is related to the actual picture -roots revealed from the heavy wind storm. I think it worked well to express the real event. Peace.
You got me closer to the ground. I love it!:)
GZ,
So apt for spring when we crave the scent of mother earth. Well said.
rel
Love the view through your Haikus.
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